My only big concern with this paper is focusing on a certain part rather than a broad general area where it can go in so many directions. Just make my claim a little easier to find and tidy up things like with my quotes and sentence variety. I am working best with the two authors when I compared and contrast each other’s opinions as I compare it to the handbook. And with the handbook, I feel like I did a pretty good job incorporating it into my paper. My peers thought if I added a little more quotes and evidence from it it would be better. My biggest challenge I believe is the flow of the paper as well as the being more clear with my claim. The only suggestion I got to fix all of these problems is to get help rearranging my paragraphs or adding in more evidence to make it sound better. One quote, in particular, comes from Scheuer which is “The “career education” bandwagon seems to suggest that shortcuts are available to students that lead directly to high-paying jobs-leaving out “frills” like learning how to write and speak well, how to understand the nuances of literary texts and scientific concepts, how to collaborate with others on research” I just need to add a little more explaining and truly understand what the quote is saying and then ill be able to move on confidently. So to sum it all up I have a lot of workv to do.
