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At the University of New England, “you will benefit from an innovative common learning experience known as the Core Curriculum. The courses and events comprising the Core help you explore four different themes one during each undergraduate year from the perspectives of multiple disciplines.” Through this work, you gain a foundation in the liberal arts that prepares you for the complex challenges of our modern world. You also gain essential skills of critical thinking and communications that will help you achieve your educational goals no matter your field of study. According to Jeffrey Scheuer, a liberal arts education is a “wellspring of ideas and questions, and a way of promoting flexibility and openness to diverse perspectives” (3). Therefore if you were an undergraduate student at UNE who has a variety of ideas, questions, and flexibility employers will want what students have to offer when applying for jobs.
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At the University of New England, “you will benefit from an innovative common learning experience known as the Core Curriculum… the Core help you explore four different themes… from the perspectives of multiple disciplines.” Through this work, you can gain a foundation in the liberal arts that prepares you for the complex challenges of our modern world. You also gain essential skills of critical thinking and communications that will help you achieve your educational goals no matter your field of study. According to Jeffrey Scheuer, a liberal arts education is a “wellspring of ideas and questions, and a way of promoting flexibility and openness to diverse perspectives” (3). Therefore if you were an undergraduate student at UNE who has a variety of ideas, questions, and flexibility employers will want to explore and see what the school has to offer when applying for jobs and just any useful goals in life.
What I did to fix my paragraph was shortened the quote to get the same meaning and I made my sentences flow better.
